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Margaret Ann Silver's avatar

I went with two directions--what the line made me think of, and then trying your method with the beginning words.

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“And the day is loud with voices speaking”

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We always planned my oral surgeries for a Friday morning

followed by hours of sedated living, not awake

but not asleep, the pain moderated more by ice

switched every twenty minutes, the nails hammered

into the roof of my mouth easing out as the meds took hold

then hammered back in with a pound pound pound

the minute meds ended.

The room wasn’t just dark, but blue

the underneath of the ocean pushing

the ink of octopi, the scrape of coral

as I fought to rise to the surface.

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Unrequited crushes crushed me

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“And” was always how I started my poems when I was in junior high

the drama flaring from my skin like a pheromone all its own

days spent mooning about one boy for months or maybe years.

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Is it sad to look back at that self, all the time wasted, all the tears

loudly pouring down my cheeks, in my heart, writing diary entries

with no end in sight about those feelings? Yes. I heard his

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voice even when he wasn’t around, always looking up when I heard a boy

speaking, even when it wasn’t him. It was never him, anyway, just

the idea of him.

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Tara Connor's avatar

Oh, I love both of these! And two poems! You over achiever, you. The oral surgery one made me wince, remembering the pain of a misdiagnosed abscess a few years ago. One of the few times in my life I have been so acutely aware of when the pain killer starts to kick in. Thanks so much for being here and participating so whole heartedly. 🤗

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Margaret Ann Silver's avatar

Thank you, Tara. It’s been a rough week and it felt good to just sit down and write as fast as I could.

I love your poem 💛. I found myself thinking about it so much yesterday.

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Melanie Bettinelli's avatar

I love both of these! But especially the end of the first and the undersea feeling, I can feel the blue!

"The room wasn’t just dark, but blue

the underneath of the ocean pushing

the ink of octopi, the scrape of coral

as I fought to rise to the surface."

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Margaret Ann Silver's avatar

Thank you, Melanie! It’s so weird how I remember the room as being blue because there was nothing making it blue…

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D. Rhodes's avatar

Here is a first pass. It sort of feels like the middle of a poem. I wonder what it’s about. =)

and no matter the hour

the air howls through these rooms

day and evening, this granite house

is unsettled

loud with boots in the street

with creaks on the floorboards

voices rising in the stairwell

speaking quarry language, igneous elegies

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Tara Connor's avatar

Fantastic! I love the sense of some ongoing action - the wind, the creaking. Thanks for sharing.

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Melanie Bettinelli's avatar

It took a while. I guess I had to sit with it and let it germinate in the dark. But tonight, finally, something opened up.

'And the day is loud with voices speaking'

But I cannot hear what they are saying. So much noise filling my ears.

Or I can hear what they are saying, but they are unimportant.

They are drowning the Voice.

Blizzard voices

snow voices

tree voices

wind voices

voices of the departed birds

voices of the withered crabapples

voices of the unpruned bushes

voices of the unharvested seeds

voices of the irises I didn't cut

of the roses I didn't pluck

voices of the seeds unsown

of the tools left to rust

voices of the broken shovels

voices of blisters

voices of headaches

voices of panic and fear

of hurt wrists

voices of laundry unwashed

undried

unfolded

voices of dirty floors

and dirty counters

and dirty dishes

voices of words unwritten

voices of words that should never have been said

voices of regret

voices of hope

voices of love

voices asking, demanding

voices telling, berating

voices pleading

and then the one voice I do not heed

the voice of silence

whispering peace

whispering joy

the still small voice

within and beneath and beyond

all the other voices

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Tara Connor's avatar

I love the way this becomes a kind of litany of loss. Really powerful. Thanks for sharing!

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Melanie Bettinelli's avatar

Oh! I hadn't thought of it as a litany of loss, but I like that. Thank you.

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Tristan Dueck's avatar

It’s lunchtime in my classroom.

Our little school has no cafeteria

So children eat, crumbs and grease,

In the same desks that

Hold all their book learning.

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I check my notifications and

See the new prompt is out,

"And the day is loud with voices speaking"

I smile to myself because

This is so exacting of the moment.

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Teenagers discussing how they could build

An outdoor hockey rink they could keep

For more than our coldest three weeks allows,

Debating the best lunch to bring to school,

Someone seems adamant about ham sandwiches.

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Pulling out the Bible memory work paper,

Envisioning it shorter and more memorize-able.

Suddenly a pun war breaks out and

Conscientious objectors sit back with silent appreciation

While pun soldiers, loaded with brain ammo, aim and fire.

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A gift, this day, loud with voices speaking.

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Tara Connor's avatar

This is great. I love the idea that the prompt and the place you were when you read it got together to help you make a poem. Magic!

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Tristan Dueck's avatar

Thank you Tara. And your poem made my heart ache, I have elderly grandparents and lately it seems very important that they tell all their stories! Your poem is filled with love.

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Darlene Moore Berg's avatar

Your poem Memory tears at the heart especially for anyone who has watched the progression of a dementia close at hand. Very well written.

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Tara Connor's avatar

Thank you, Darlene. I’m sorry you have the experience with dementia to make this feel familiar.

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Darlene Moore Berg's avatar

My mother and mother in law both.

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LeeAnn Pickrell's avatar

“memory is a country lost in time”—that may be one of the most beautiful lines I’ve ever read. Your poem is heartbreaking and so rich.

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Tara Connor's avatar

Oh, what a lovely thing to say. Thank you, LeeAnn. 🤗

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Melanie Bettinelli's avatar

"Speaking to one who no longer knows her mother tongue

and looks at you like a visitor from another world"

How beautiful and heartbreaking.

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Margaret Ann Silver's avatar

Oh my goodness. This is so gorgeous, Tara. So beautiful and so sad.

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