Those ending lines! I love the journey that the bird takes and how we take it with the speaker; I felt like my eyes were following the poem the way the speaker was following the bird.
I'm a little tapped out, so here is my silly offering:
In which I write a silly poem
.
Do you remember in “Charlie and the Chocolate Factory”
When they were riding the boat down the watery chocolate river
Which even try as I might I couldn’t see as anything but brown water
And Gene Wilder did the whole thing where he sings a creepy song
And I think one part of it is “No matter where it’s going”
And “Nobody will by knowing,” his big blue eyes swiveling?
Was that an allusion to Edna St. Vincent Millay’s poem?
Was the underlying message of that journey
That we are all going somewhere sometime with some poet
Whistle howling, station receding, the world going small?
Those ending lines! I love the journey that the bird takes and how we take it with the speaker; I felt like my eyes were following the poem the way the speaker was following the bird.
I'm a little tapped out, so here is my silly offering:
In which I write a silly poem
.
Do you remember in “Charlie and the Chocolate Factory”
When they were riding the boat down the watery chocolate river
Which even try as I might I couldn’t see as anything but brown water
And Gene Wilder did the whole thing where he sings a creepy song
And I think one part of it is “No matter where it’s going”
And “Nobody will by knowing,” his big blue eyes swiveling?
Was that an allusion to Edna St. Vincent Millay’s poem?
Was the underlying message of that journey
That we are all going somewhere sometime with some poet
Whistle howling, station receding, the world going small?
I like the description of the finch's swooping flight. And that final line "with a bit of spring in its beak" is perfect.